On Her Mind

So this was a caption that I'd written awhile back, but I wasn't that happy with it, so I'd forgone publishing it for awhile. Today, I went back and cut some text, changed some things, and over all, I am much more pleased with how it turned out this go around. I've posted the original as well, so if you'd like to see how it originally was, take a look, and let me know what you think of the changes!

Transcript: Ardent squeals continued to stream out from Chloe’s lips as the particularly well hung stud behind her continued to pound her eager pussy. Being in Chloe’s body was literally an out of body experience for Ben and though there was a particular discomfort to being so roughly dominated by another male, the overpowering sensation of heavenly bliss from Chloe’s female body certainly more than made up for it.

Ben had originally possessed Chloe’s body at the request of his good friend and Chloe’s boyfriend, Dan, who was looking for a discreet way to better learn how to please Chloe in bed. Being the good friend thatBen was,he had agreed to Dan’s plan. A few magic potions later, Ben had found himself in Chloe’s body.

The man pleasuring her at the moment however was not Dan, but Lance, the football team’s star fullback. The precarious situation had all began when, following Dan’s takeover of her body, he had found Chloe at Lance’s house and in the middle of a steamy make out session. Chloe was cheating on Dan! He’d wanted to pull away, but had thought better of it and stopped himself to avoid giving himself away. As dumb as Lance was, even he could’ve figured out that something was amiss if Chloe’s demeanor suddenly changed. The longer he allowed Lance to go on however, the more he found himself enjoying it, even starting to think of himself as her. If Chloe was a fine instrument, then Lance was a master musician. Lance knew just where and how to touch her petite body and what to say to fill her stomach with a thousand fluttering butterflies. It wasn’t long before the new Chloe had caved into her desires and
allowed Lance to take her entirely.

The pleasure that Chloe was experiencing now seemed almost ethereal. She’d never felt such bliss. For awhile now, the entire area from her hips to the tops of her thighs had been getting really warm. Her body had started to get tight as a wonderful pressure began to build up within her, signaling the point of no return. It had gotten tighter and tighter and warmer and warmer until suddenly, giant satisfying contractions began all over her body. Her toes clenched, her nipples grew hard, and her pussy had started to throb and convulse. She let out a feverish cry, begging Lance not to stop, but to fuck her harder.

Her thighs were still shaking and her body soaking wet as Lance flipped her over and spurted his sticky load all over her hot body. That had been amazing. Basking in the warm afterglow of her mind blowing orgasm, Chloe was no longer contemplating on the least painful way to break the news to Dan, but rather how long it would take Lance before he was ready for round two...



ORIGINAL:

Note: Original title was "Heartbreaking Discoveries"

Not terribly happy with the layout, but it's the best I could come up with for now. I may go back and try to split this into a two panel caption later...

Transcript: Ardent squeals continued to stream out from Chloe’s body as the particularly well hung stud behind her continued to pound her eager pussy. Being in Chloe’s body was literally an out of body experience for Ben and though there was a particular discomfort to being so roughly dominated by another male, the overpowering sensation of heavenly bliss from Chloe’s female body certainly more than made up for it.

Ben had originally possessed Chloe’s body at the request of his good friend and Chloe’s boyfriend, Dan. Noticing that Chloe had never had an orgasm with him in the two years that they’d been together, Dan had intended it as a way for him to discreetly experiment on her body and thus learn how to please her in bed. Ben had reassured his friend that many girls couldn’t climax from vaginal stimulation alone and that perhaps Chloe was just one of them. To help put his friend’s mind at ease though, he still agreed to take over Chloe’s body so that Dan could experiment with it in secret.

The man pleasuring her at the moment however was not Dan, but Lance, the football team’s star fullback. The precarious situation had all began when, following Dan’s takeover of her body, he had found Chloe to be at Lance’s house and in the middle of a steamy make out session. He’d immediately wanted to pull away, repulsed at the idea of kissing another guy, but he’d had to stop himself to avoid giving himself away. As few brain cells as Lance had left over from all the hits he’d suffered, even he could’ve figured out that something was amiss if Chloe’s demeanor had suddenly changed. However, the longer that Ben had held out, the more he had come to enjoy the feelings of Lance’s muscular body against his new feminine one. Strangely enough, he’d even found himself starting to think of himself as Chloe and wanting more. Things had progressed rather quickly after that, one thing leading to another and soon she had found herself in the position she was in now.

The pleasure that Chloe was experiencing almost seemed to be ethereal. She’d never felt like this before in her life. For awhile now, the entire area from her hips to the tops of her thighs had been getting really warm. Her body had started to get tight as a wonderful pressure began to build up within her, signaling the point of no return. It had gotten tighter and tighter and warmer and warmer until suddenly, giant satisfying contractions covered her entire body. Her toes had clenched, her nipples grown hard, and the inside walls of her pussy had started throbbing and convulsing, causing her to let out a scream, begging Lance not to stop, but to fuck her harder. Her thighs were still shaking and her body soaking wet when Lance had flipped her over and spurted his load all over her tight little stomach. That had been amazing. As she basked in the warm afterglow of her mind blowing orgasm, Chloe contemplated on the least painful way to break the news to Dan…